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:iconintricately-ordinary:
I think the thing I appreciate most about your poetry is your beautiful pacing. You pull us through the whole poem, as it flows easily thought to thought, then you simply drop us- adding more emphasis to the line "It was pleading for release."

I think it's a good thing you uploaded it, even if you were scared
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:iconjakesexception:
A lot of people have said that. They say that I build stuff up and then just drop it straight away. I think it's not really a skill, but people seem to love it for some bizarre reason... I wish I knew why...

I was scared for two reasons:
> Obviously the content; that's a given.
> Coming off the back of the DD, I knew people were expecting something great. I was actually debating uploading something else besides this, but I'm glad I went with this piece now.
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
I don't think it's necessarily a skill to be able to drop things off, but I wouldn't have ended this poem any other way. It's perfect the way it just stops. The reason I said my favorite thing is your pacing is because you consistently end things well and pace them so they are natural, and the reader is left thinking.

I get that. Anytime I've had a piece that's remotely popular, I worry whatever else I upload will not match up to it. But, I'm glad you chose it, too. Stay true to yourself.
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:iconjakesexception:
There is actually an alternate ending stanza to this.
I know - insane, right?
It was much more gory and shocking; making a pseudo-statement against the theme of the poem in general [- orgies or whatever it was].
I cut it after the line "Cutting off the horses head. / Serving it silver." made its way in.
Christ, it WAS gory...
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
Well you can't just leave me hanging like that :XD: What was the alternate ending stanza?
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:iconjakesexception:
Sorry dudette - I'm keeping it for another day.

Actually speaking of:
"Oh, out of curiosity, if I was to release a PDF containing unreleased poems, would you purchase it? It would be a 'donate what you want' thing - with like a 1.00 / $2.00 minimum. Your thoughts? I'm trying to gauge a consensus here..."

I'm considering doing this; what do you think?
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
;-; I have no monies right now. my wallet cries softly at night.

but, yes, if I had adequate cash that would be something I'd love to do :la:
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:iconjakesexception:
It's still only an idea...

I have the template saved and I'm compiling it now; I'm still not sure if I'll release it, though.
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:iconlothlorien-vampyre:
I love your poetry. It doesn't matter if the lines are vague or explicit, or if the subject is erotic or not, you write with such passion. If I could convey just a fraction of that passion into my prose...
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:iconjakesexception:
Just be more honest. Write about your dreams. Your fetishes. Your lovers old and new. The kind of shit you want to try when you grow up - just don't make it too personal and you'll be set.
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