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Daily Deviation
Daily Deviation
November 15, 2012
Boy. is a poem that punches the reader with that first line and leaves them out of breath for the entirety of the experience. The writer, *JakesException is someone not to be glanced over or underestimated. A lot of us could stand to learn a thing or two from his gallery full of work that has a mentality of 'in your face and deal with it' badassery.
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Literature
epitaph
in the end
when i'm almost gone
and all i've left
is a red lamp
and a ragged song
to pave my way
into the thunderstorm
let every raindrop murmur
i loved you and lost
nothing but emptiness
and the company
of ghosts
Literature
I Mean to Get You Alone
You have sharp
pulse-elevating teeth
the stuff I imagine heart attacks
are made of
I'm bent on selling you a handful of smiles
specifically crafted
to distract you from the fact that
I have almost nothing to say
and now you're steering this conversation
in a direction that suggests you've
forgotten that I
don't watch movies or do much of
anything but work which maybe
explains why one glass of wine gets me
wrapped around you
car to streetlight
crash style
mangled limbs
breeding curious onlookers and my insurance has
expired
you're leaning in and all I can think is
I don't have insurance
Literature
couldn't blue
i draw a picture of
tomorrow morning:
a man in a silver box sells
75 cent coffee and bad bagels.
his shirt is the kind of blue no one ever
tried to name a crayon after.
dust-plastic blue,
tried to love you
(couldn't)
blue.
and the morning is that same color,
the color of canned lightning-bugs and
unfiltered cigarettes and desire,
because that is all you
draw with couldn't blue.
i pay him 1.25 in change and purse-lint
so that a fourth-world factory can make more
silver boxes to sell more things
more stale blueberry muffins.
and he will keep gathering change
in 75 cent purse-lint increments
in the small sinking townships of
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The first time I read it, it was difficult to understand. But the next time around, I STILL barely got it, but it was forming an image. After about 5 or 6 more readings, I finally got it and was nearly taken aback. Such power, yet such hidden beauty. When you first start, it sounds like it's going to be some beginning to a dirty novel, but then you read it over and over and OVER again. You begin to be appalled. It's odd: you want to keep reading, despite that.
The meaning, to me anyhow, is that a man (judging by the title, the "narrator" is a male) feels like he wants too much of a physical relationship and it makes his significant other (didn't give a gender, so I'll leave it at that) sad, resent-filled, or even just plain angry. Or maybe he was too rough, in a sense? Either way, in the end, it seems to me that the pain becomes too much for him to bear and he feels it necessary to burn the pain away, or simply kill him with the same burning that caused the more physical than emotional relationship.
Even if that's not the original intent, that's how I interpret it. And it made me cringe at first. But then I softened and looked deeper, noticing how much a character like that could be in pain. (that wording might not have been correct)
I have never read a better poem, aside from anything by Robert Frost. Exceptional. I literally have no complaints.